Vulture

Okay. First of all the title interested me right away as I have yet to see vulture used in any poem. So that right there is a bonus. And the poem did not disappoint.

The wording is perfect. You painted the scene well because when I think of vultures I think of the high desert or a western town. Maybe this is just me but all this connects so well. Carcasses is perfect because love can really "kill you" or your spirit. And when you are feeling low you turn to coping some how. Smoking is used again perfectly as it shows the loneliness of addiction as do shadows.

The third stanza is my favorite. Because when you feel alone you will take anything that is given to you. As in love so you latch yourself to anything you can. Scrap and vulture also work well together as it coinsides with the meaning of the poem. The ending is great as well. It wraps up the poem nicely.

The best part of the poem I feel is the wording. You connect each stanza well with just one word I feel and that in turn keeps the readers mind guessing as to what happens next. By the way I loved how you made it seem like a story the stanzas being "chapters" each stanza its only story with beautiful imagery. One of your best!

Nice poem written with good style.

NIce short poem... impressive style of writing. Really enjoyed it.

Wow! Spectacular Hannah! I love your way of describing things! I must say, the love and its pain you described here is real painful. I am as always, loving your writing and you did a very good job with this!

Keep writing :)

Nominated!

Loving the short layout, and being centred, really works well for it.

Your title really caught my eye, but I was actually quite surprised by your content. I was not expecting that at all.

As for the poem, I thought you done so well to keep it all connected together, and yet make it so short and powerful. I think the word carcases was well needed in the beginning, to show that you didn't look too much in depth to their heart or soul, you just aimed at the idea of a man, no matter what was inside, just the outside would be better than nothing?

You then go on to mention the promises which I find fitting, because how many of us cling on to those empty promises, and somehow believe that one day they will happen. Nicely portrayed here through the smoke and the shadows. Like they are all around you and you become lost in them, even though you know it is not good for you.

I like your ending, again showing that need for affection, something that acknowledges you. The ending is so powerful, to imply that you have become trapped inside a love that was never really love, it was merely "enough" to settle for, and perhaps even hopeful that it would get deeper through time, but however, you now find yourself desperate for any kind of love you can find.

This poem I found was different from your normal ways of writing, or content topic, I felt it to be quite raw and deep.

Enjoyed the read, well done.