Except I'm alive

by UtterlyAlive   Jun 9, 2014


Time doesn't stop.
But worlds do.
On February 7, 2013,
My world ended.
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Time enfolded me but I didn't move.
I was as still as your heart,
As cold as your skin,
I was exactly like you.

Except I was alive.

I didn't breathe as I held your hand,
Didn't cry as I watched you,
I wasn't afraid,
Because I was just like you

Except I was alive

I didn't move,
Didn't scream,
I refused to breathe,
I wanted to be like you

Except I was alive

I'm lifeless and broken,
Just shattered remains,
Take me away from here,
I want to be like you!

Except I'm alive

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  • 4 years ago

    by paul moxon

    Very moving

  • 4 years ago

    by paul moxon

    Very moving

  • 4 years ago

    by mazzy star

    Yes, you are right.
    Time doesn't stop, but worlds do.
    With the magic of your words you made it deep, sad and beautiful.
    I loved it.

  • 4 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Wow. loved it. xo

  • 4 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I really liked how you used the title here. It's like you are stating you are alive but most poets can figure out since this is in the sad category the deeper meaning behind the title to me says you don't want to be. And the introduction was well worded because to me it gives the reader the reason why you feel the way you do. The way you wrote the first stanza is great because it introduces the sad part of the poem. You can tell you are talking about death and how you feel. You seem to be embracing the fact you will someday. This person meant so much to you that they were your whole world. The tone of this poem is depression and just that one phrase "expect I'm alive" is powerful enough to stand on its own. So I love how you made it its own line.

    This person seems to just be barely holding onto their life. To me it can be explained like this: physically you are here but emotionally and mentally you are not. The story is well thought out though for you wrote from your heart and soul. No matter what hang on. It might be hard now but it is worth it. Well done.