Giggles!!! Yes I can understand why she would be disappointed.. 80 lashes with a wet noodle for you Mister! :-)
But you reposted it and that is a good thing~
4 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
I Am also glad you put this one back up. I get the sense that this is for your wife (or love) but the way you worded it is unique. The first line is very captivating. With love you never really know but your heart does. I think what you are saying through out is that everything she does or you do affects your everyday life. My personal favorite line is the about not being able to sleep because its very true. If one thing does not happen thoughts always seem to race.
Love is a very magical thing when it finds you. There are no errors that I saw. But I love how you kind of made it into a heart. Especially the second half. Very impressive. And another thing I saw was that toward the end it got more romantic in stature. Very clever whether it was intentional or not :). Another thing is from the start you question whether she is the one. But over time you know more and more. Just like in the poem. Well done!
It has been long since I read such a lovelike poem. The whole feeling that brings to life butterflies in your stomach not sure if the world is crumbling under your feet or the universe is bending to your will. Such is what makes it worth called love.