It has improved! There is still some more room for improvement. Though, the poem reads smoother than before. Nice.

Hmmmmmmm

nice poem, full of strength.

Victory in your affairs
A smile that you wear
With lots of gratitude to share

Really loved this stanza...very well written.

all the best & take care

Bliss in prayers
That makes you aware
Nothing to despair

^^I like this opening stanza and its true. There is bliss in prayers and the despair we feel at times dissolves with prayers.

Victory in your affairs
A smile that you wear
With lots of gratitude to share

^^This ending is filled with a life full of spirit and positiveness. Nicely penned. :)