Daring The Shadows

by Baby Rainbow   Sep 24, 2014


A landscape of dreams
stirs my imagination
in the stillness of a lonely night.

Evening shadows paint fields
with silhouette graffiti,
while a green sea of envy
dares the memories emerging
from the mist.

Take me away,
take me afar,
take me to the place
where my loved ones are.

A ghostly white sea
drowns my entire soul,
leaving my body washed ashore
as a souvenir of my life.

I dared the shadows of darkness
and I paid the price for my dream,
as they granted my pleading wishes:

Take me away,
take me afar,
take me to the place
where my loved ones are.

Saffie
23

8/9/14

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  • 2 years ago

    by Mihir Deshmukh

    Really enjoyed reading this one..............thank you for haring it!!!!!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Saffie makes me cry with her raw, sad pieces- This week she did just that and more with her very pretty, song like crafting of this poem.. I sang it while reading.
    Longing to fly away, the depths of sadness can be felt in each line...
    This is something different from Saffie, it really reads like a flowing song... very unique and drenched in emotions.. Powerful piece this week!

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment:

    A landscape of dreams
    stirs my imagination
    in the stillness of a lonely night.

    ^^I simply like this opening. A landscape of
    dreams just brings on such an interesting image to
    my mind and that too on a lonely night. It really
    sets the scene as well as the writer's mood preparing
    the reader for what is to come.

    As the poem unfolds it feels like one is afloat in the
    dark sea while memories of loved ones haunt the
    writer's world. The thought of surviving without
    them creates a heaviness one can't let go. I also
    like the repetition of "take me away, take me afar,
    take me to the place where my loved ones are"

    There is a beautiful sadness to this and is also
    haunting. What kept coming to my mind was the
    image of a siren who calls all to their demise. A
    vivid, beautiful, sad and haunting read!

  • 3 years ago

    by Joker22

    Cool poem!

  • 3 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    So happy this won- Love you Saffie <3