Comments : Purvi Gadia(acrostic poem)

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, I assume this was your first attempt since you asked about it, so if I am correct, then well done!

    What a great first attempt, it looks like you will be quite good at mastering the forms when you come across them.

    I like how you used both of your names, and poem content flowed from one name to the other, without going off to another topic, which is often done in these types of forms.

    Very good work!

    Hope to see you attempt more forms.

    • 3 years ago

      by Purvi Gadia

      Thanks a lot saffie..... I never really expected I would be able to write this.....I gotta thank you too for the prompt.

  • 3 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    For this to be your first attempt at an acrostic, I gotta say you done great. I really love how it is one sentence instead of creating two seperate ones for each name, it flows flawlessly.

    Beautiful work!

  • 3 years ago

    by Purvi Gadia

    Thamkyou.... In deed it's my first attempt.... And I'm very proud of it.

  • 3 years ago

    by uttAm

    Got to know that its your first attempt, but it seems you are already an expert in this form....keep it up!!:)

    • 3 years ago

      by Purvi Gadia

      Thank you uttam....I was jumping when I finished this poem.

  • 2 years ago

    by Kristen

    Imagery poems are great in short forms because it lets us see what the author was or is trying to convey inside their own mind. Utopia is such a strong word to use because itself can mean happiness and that is what I believe you were going for here. If the title speaks for a name then this person is portraying their happiness within themselves or even another person that they are friends with. This poem is simple but complex in its meaning but that is what makes it well crafted. after sadness was in your life you found the other side within happiness. what also interested me was the river of ashes, which could be interpreted in a lot of ways as well, as in a house burning to ashes, you spreading a loved ones ashes in a favorite river. But I think what you are going for here is the ashes of what is inside yourself and the ashes of negativity that have burned and bliss has spread, either way this is a well crafted write!

    • 2 years ago

      by Purvi Gadia

      Yes it is my name...and thank you for that comment

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brilliant acrostic, full of wonderful imagery. Acrostics are harder than people think, especially to write one this good.
    All the best,
    Ben

  • 6 months ago

    by Sai

    I have to say it's probably the first time I've read an acrostic that's one sentence, and I enjoyed it. In that sense, I think this sets your poem apart from others of the same style. I also like your word choice.

  • 3 months ago

    by AT

    Don't make it your last attempt because you are so good in this format of the poetry.