It's so good to read a new poem from you, I think it's been years! Hope you've been doing well and glad you're back on here writing.
I thought throughout this piece, there was a good flow. Asking these questions connects the reader even more; I feel your frustrations at trying to pen this, at asking this person possibly what it would take to heal, but then you realize you can move on without them. An emotional piece, your voice is very strong in each stanza and I especially like how you progress in the poem. You are unable to forget, still hurting yourself by holding on to what was, all of the memories, yet you know maybe deep down you deserve better than these lies. Such an impact with the ending and the realization this person will not silence you; you will live strong, stand strong, speak strong, even if it begins in stutters.
Hey there! Its so good to see a poem by you after a long time! From the poem I can see, feel the heaviness and the aches of life you are combating and I sincerely hope that it will start to ease so you can see the sun shine...take care dear.
Oh I love this poem..... I am so so so much in love with it.... Glad it won.
I love how the sentences rhyme while I read it.... I've never read anything like that before.
I also love the ending of your poem.... Very powerful.
Especially the last sentence was wonderful...
A coward you stand,
less than a man, to silence a woman's tongue.
Well this poem left me speechless!
The message of love lost I presume, but just wow!!!
The rhyme scheme in this was elegantly placed in areas that made is so incredibly unique to me. The flow had a rhythm, and that is difficult to do, when you take into consideration of the tone of message in this piece. I applaud Lady Nik for this piece here... The wording was tasteful and very creative. Powerful and well written piece this week!!
The flow to this poem is what really impressed me this week. There is nothing worse than trying to read a lengthy poem that has a very rough, or a non existent flow, but this poem really was easy to read and the rhyming throughout really matched the flow also, subtle and not forced. The message of the poem was portrayed well with the battle within oneself. Trying to move on from someone who has hurt you, perhaps beaten your confidence down, but this author shows they are not ready to give up and that they will be proud of who they are. The use of the stutter works well because it shows that despite having this struggle with words, their confidence is now growing and they managed to get the words out eventually. The ending was very powerful, comparing this worthless character to dust which only takes up a small part of the mind now, shows healing and moving on. Really good write.