Comments : Tonight, Jesus Won't Be Born

  • 2 years ago

    by Everlasting

    This word "liquid" made me feel like it didn't belong in the poem. That's just my opinion though

    so as to hide her liquid eyes,

    Hmm may be describe her eyes in some other way? As to hide her tearful eyes. Even if it's cliche.. I think it may suit the poem better.

    The content it's a sad reality.

  • 2 years ago

    by Karla

    Beautiful, my friend!

  • 2 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    The conversation between the mother and daughter brought me to tears. Probably because a few days ago, I listened to a similar conversation. The girl was begging her mom to buy her a small Christmas tree, and the mother kept saying "no, we can't afford that". So heartbreaking to know that those kids know all about war and guns, and nothing about joy.
    This piece was heartfelt and real. I loved it even more when you translated it into Arabic. You really should be on here more often, I missed your poetry.

  • 2 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Would there be a time when festivities are not buried in the tomb of human intolerance.
    Well said, brother.

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    What a really touching write, very realistic conversation, and I can imagine the scene, and the terrifying pain the mother holds inside about the future for herself and her daughter. What a tragedy you have portrayed.

    I also like how you show the true role of a mother in how she always tries to hide her own sorrow and feelings, from her child, and tries her best to offer hope and positivity to her instead.

    This is one of those poems that make you feel grateful for every single thing you have that you take for granted, such as warmth, a house, shelter, food etc.

    A really stunning poem. I think the use of the conversation was a good idea to make this poem, it worked very well.

    Nice to see you write again!

  • 2 years ago

    by uttAm

    Wow....such a great write, i almost got tear in my eyes after reading this. Truly amazing!

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment;

    This poem not only highlights the sorrow currently seen in so many parts of the religiously centered world (the middle east especially now) and how holidays wont be the same this year because of the riots and down turns the pains and brokeness of each country and it's civil disrupt state. I cannot tell if that was the inspiration for this or not, though it does feel like it, to me at least, and that is why it truly captivated me. This piece pours out heart and soul, begging the reader to understand the pain of the world and the destroyed feel of upcoming holidays and celebrations simply because the gods and beings they believe in currently seem to be MIA. The emotion in this short, delicate piece is overwhelming. The word choice and every literary skill is spot on. Abed has penned nothing short of perfection this week.

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem holds such a sad story, but one that you cannot stop reading, it is like a scene in a film that you rewind to watch again because it so moving. The poem is based around a conversation between mother and daughter, who seem to be victims of a world disaster and have nothing to their names, yet they have each other. The wording of the poem is very descriptive, and really does tug at your heart. The scene is so vivid, you just want to reach out to the characters and look after them! Beautiful poem.

  • 1 year ago

    by Pratap Rudra

    V nice, I could picture it in my mind as you narrate. Good one.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    This piece highlights how Christmas feels to many people.
    On one hand we have the warmth of people that can have anything an the other hand the coldness' of those that would be appreciative of just one thing to know the warmth of Christmas and what it brings.
    It pulled at my heart strings.

    All the best, Em