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  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I was just a fabric in need of
    needlework. You was just a mascot
    good at concealing who you really
    were.

    second line should read you were - not correct grammar

    Otherwise, this is an interestingly penned piece. Nice use of imagery and creative word choice, even though it could have been a bit more spiced up because it seemed to take away from the beauty of the piece.

  • 9 years ago

    by Autumn Leaves

    Thanks