I want to write more poetry,
more of you, of words that ryhme
walking yet running back and forth
wandering- travelling back in time.
Congrats on this win, I am happy this won, The rhyming is great and the way you take us on a journey is inspiring. There is a strong meaning here to start out with, first you want to see this person again, perhaps a person from your past? I am thinking that because travelling back in time, and the poetry metaphor is great, it seems like this person is unique or beautiful in their own way like a poem.
Breathing you in, like a summer day
like a sweet odor stuck everywhere
in my gardens of your crystal eyes,
on my skin, on every lock of my hair.
^ When you are close with someone you know every inch of their live and you can smell something and that will remind you of them. Everything you smell reminds you of them it seems, or that is how I read into it. You look into their eyes and see their soul. and it just makes you love them even more.
Falling and desolving in your cup;
laughing like sipping was by choice
leaving insomnia in the years behind,
sleeping deeply to the hums of your voice
^ wow, this stanza tells me that you fell deep in love with them or that's again how I read into it. Before you met them, you couldn't sleep much, but again it takes that one person to comfort you in a way that all the pain and hurt goes away :).
I can keep you far, yet keep you close
I can rewrite you ceaselessly, from title to toes.
^ This is where the poem gets to me, what a stunning ending you have written well. No matter where they are you will keep them close. and each poem/story can be rewritten anytime and that line tells me that people can change for the better if they tried. great write hon 5/5
Sometimes I wish I could live inside another poet's mind. It's awesome seeing the ideas one can come up with, and wish you could make it your own. Title to toes just seemed so unique to me. A phrase I've never heard of before, and your rhyming is as effortless as I remember. Such a sweet loving poem about someone. Loved every bit of this.