From Title to Toes

by Sunshine   Dec 25, 2014


I want to write more poetry,
more of you, of words that ryhme

walking yet running back and forth
wandering- travelling back in time.

Breathing you in, like a summer day
like a sweet odor stuck everywhere

in my gardens of your crystal eyes,
on my skin, on every lock of my hair.

Falling and desolving in your cup;
laughing like sipping was by choice

leaving insomnia in the years behind,
sleeping deeply to the hums of your voice

Perchance,
I can keep you far, yet keep you close

Perhaps,
I can rewrite you ceaselessly, from title to toes.

By: Rania Moallem

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  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I want to write more poetry,
    more of you, of words that ryhme

    walking yet running back and forth
    wandering- travelling back in time.

    Congrats on this win, I am happy this won, The rhyming is great and the way you take us on a journey is inspiring. There is a strong meaning here to start out with, first you want to see this person again, perhaps a person from your past? I am thinking that because travelling back in time, and the poetry metaphor is great, it seems like this person is unique or beautiful in their own way like a poem.

    Breathing you in, like a summer day
    like a sweet odor stuck everywhere

    in my gardens of your crystal eyes,
    on my skin, on every lock of my hair.

    ^ When you are close with someone you know every inch of their live and you can smell something and that will remind you of them. Everything you smell reminds you of them it seems, or that is how I read into it. You look into their eyes and see their soul. and it just makes you love them even more.

    Falling and desolving in your cup;
    laughing like sipping was by choice

    leaving insomnia in the years behind,
    sleeping deeply to the hums of your voice

    ^ wow, this stanza tells me that you fell deep in love with them or that's again how I read into it. Before you met them, you couldn't sleep much, but again it takes that one person to comfort you in a way that all the pain and hurt goes away :).

    Perchance,
    I can keep you far, yet keep you close

    Perhaps,
    I can rewrite you ceaselessly, from title to toes.

    ^ This is where the poem gets to me, what a stunning ending you have written well. No matter where they are you will keep them close. and each poem/story can be rewritten anytime and that line tells me that people can change for the better if they tried. great write hon 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Sometimes I wish I could live inside another poet's mind. It's awesome seeing the ideas one can come up with, and wish you could make it your own. Title to toes just seemed so unique to me. A phrase I've never heard of before, and your rhyming is as effortless as I remember. Such a sweet loving poem about someone. Loved every bit of this.

  • 9 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Great!! Thanks for sharing...it spoke whats in my heart currently...wonderful !

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    To write a poem about someone from title to toes! Now that is always and forever printed on paper and in your thoughts. Liked the read...Congrats on the win!!

    • 9 years ago

      by Sunshine

      Awwww thank youu Meeena !

  • 9 years ago

    by Karla

    Love this!Congrats!

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