The title just dragged me down by my hair ! very deep very simple very raw very honest, no bet different. Quite but loud. There is like a lot of different emotions and messages to derive from this piece, esp in the opening lines.
And then your closing!! just I am reallly fond of this poem, I am not sure how I feel about the space between your last line and the verse before it, (in regard of the style of this poem, not generally speaking), however I am just so much into this write from you.