Love en route (Double Diminished Hexaverse)

by Meme   Mar 12, 2015


How

hard it
is when

a lonely
hour is
what's between

the two of us.
To just taste the
bitterness of
longing without

having the chance to
understand the laws
of separation.
When time has its own
demands against us.

What chances do we have
to walk with our fingers
interlocked, as if the
minutes laced fables for
us to dream. And I did
dream in the last hour.

Only to find myself
a strayer with a crowd
of one; how deeply I
prayed for it to be you.
To pull the strings of time
so close that I could hear

your heartbeats, and for
you to hear my voice
for the first time. Right
there on the blurry
line of distance and

fate, we stood still.
Let go of your
silence my love,
and reach out for

our fingers
to touch, see?
I told you

dreams can
conquer

time!

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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem's structure and form appealed to me in the line up this week, and I am fairly impressed by the standard! The poem is pleasurable to read, it is filled with a content which the author can relate to, and is a beautifully constructed poem. Meme has done a great job with this poem, well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by WW

    This is awesome! It's aesthetic, which is interesting because of how it effected the imagery while I read it. I thought you wrapped it up pretty well. The two stanzas in the middle were my favorite, because of the syllable room you had to work with allowed more um.. "passion" to fall through. I like you compared the interlocking fingers and the "laced" time, and drawing a "string" to pull it together. Fantastic piece! Blew me away from my laptop. I smashed into the wall behind me. Shelves went crashing. Cops were called by my neighbor downstairs. 5/5

    It needs an apostrophe on "whats" in the third stanza.

    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      But you are still alive? You are all ok? Hehe
      Thanks for the comment :)

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Ummm....memo....i dont know...but this just...ummm...sorry to say....but u just couldnt grasp me like how you always do with this poem.
    But then its just me.... :)
    your poem was awesome but i couldnt tag along with it and just ended up reading lines in between and just skinned and dint penetrate...

    but thats just me :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

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    Meeeeemeeeeee!!!!!!! this is beautifully written, so much emotion, really amazing! your form word count flow EVERYTHING is just epic!!! im sneakly reading at work but i will come back.....Oh My....after mentioning form earlier you should write moooore!!!

    Apologies for the public announcement but.......SYRUP YOU NEED TO GET YOUR BUTT OVER HERE AND READ THIS!!!!!!!

    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      Hahahaha, thanks Ben. I admit after talking to you about formed poetry this came up!

      Am glad you liked it :)

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