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Meeeeemeeeeee!!!!!!! this is beautifully written, so much emotion, really amazing! your form word count flow EVERYTHING is just epic!!! im sneakly reading at work but i will come back.....Oh My....after mentioning form earlier you should write moooore!!!

Apologies for the public announcement but.......SYRUP YOU NEED TO GET YOUR BUTT OVER HERE AND READ THIS!!!!!!!

Ummm....memo....i dont know...but this just...ummm...sorry to say....but u just couldnt grasp me like how you always do with this poem.
But then its just me.... :)
your poem was awesome but i couldnt tag along with it and just ended up reading lines in between and just skinned and dint penetrate...

but thats just me :)

This is awesome! It's aesthetic, which is interesting because of how it effected the imagery while I read it. I thought you wrapped it up pretty well. The two stanzas in the middle were my favorite, because of the syllable room you had to work with allowed more um.. "passion" to fall through. I like you compared the interlocking fingers and the "laced" time, and drawing a "string" to pull it together. Fantastic piece! Blew me away from my laptop. I smashed into the wall behind me. Shelves went crashing. Cops were called by my neighbor downstairs. 5/5

It needs an apostrophe on "whats" in the third stanza.

This poem's structure and form appealed to me in the line up this week, and I am fairly impressed by the standard! The poem is pleasurable to read, it is filled with a content which the author can relate to, and is a beautifully constructed poem. Meme has done a great job with this poem, well done.