Comments : Final Appraisal (Pensamientos De Abuela)

  • 2 years ago

    by Eric Ngobeni

    Well done

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    It's refreshing to read your newest pieces, you have always been a top favorite of mine on this site... This is powerful and very touching.

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Terrific, I just wish your title was not in all caps :)

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Terrific, I just wish your title was not in all caps :)

  • 2 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    Judging Comment

    I liked the title but not that it was capitalized all the way through, that I wasn't a fan of. Love how it's a mixture of Spanish and English in the title. Now for the poem itself it's more like telling you the setting and it's a rare to pull of this beautiful way of writing, where it's a setting and yet there's emotions on how it affects the person after all is said and done. Great tribute to a grandmother, I hope time gives a person the ability to miss that person but still be able to move on when needed to.

    - Moria Bella Bair -

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly contest April 27th
    Judging comment:

    Fantastic writing in every sense. The poet employed mesmerizing imagery could draw a series of nostalgic scenes, each unique, tragic, picturesque and very well penned. Using a remarkable one block structure and unusual diction this poem had that resonating effect on the mind of the reader which lasts for very long time.
    I have recognized how each thought (supposedly stanza) sounded strong and emphasising, a smart use for the passive tense which deepen the emotions and the meaning through out the piece,
    ~Gone is her patched lazy boy/ Sold are the living room comforts ..etc
    All in all, worth reading, voting and winning.

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This is a truly breathtaking poem, full of detailed imagery and visuals. FTS Miles has flavored this site over the years with his visual mastery and I was in awe!

    To lose a loved one is devastating and here he takes us on a journey of going through her belongings.. its such a heart wrenching and yet creative piece... very touching read this week!!