Belonging.

by Poet on the Piano   Apr 17, 2015


I want to be found
in you
through you
within you

so that when
you open your
eyes at 5:43
on a Sunday morning
you realize you are
born
today
and those actions
in the past
don't count as
living

that we revere a
world
together
swallowing
nothing but
clarity
as we bloom
even when
the earth dirties
its people
and the people
destroy creation.

I thought I could
isolate my purpose
so no one would
miss what I had
gained
but I need direction -
if I'm supposed to get
lost
it's because of you
and we'll be
found

together.

-
Written 4/16/15 @ 11:45 PM

Thanks to Saffie for the challenge to write a poem based off of this quote: "you sometimes think you want to disappear but all you really want is to be found."

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  • 8 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly contest April 27th
    Judging comment:

    Beautifully simple, I like how this well written free verse piece passionately felt without excessive use of complicated wording, similes or metaphors. A single thought expressing the title and neatly framed.

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I love what you done with this piece! So glad you decided to write a poem from the quote, you went down a great avenue!

    I especially like your layout in this piece. AS you know, I am a bigger fan of punctuated work than not, but when I read some poems which are not punctuated and they are good poems, the punctuation is not needed! And this is definitely one of these poems.

    They layout is lovely, and really works along with the lack of punctuation. It is like one long thought, that just kept drawing out longer.

    The passion in the first lines are well portrayed, repeating that want to be found, but in the different ways, in every way possible. Nicely opened.

    Love the attitude in the next stanza, and how you make that time so precise, it really works, and gives you that really uplifting feeling of hope and refreshment for a new day.

    I think your third stanza is powerful because it speaks of the truth, of the ugly part of this world, but with that ugliness there is always beauty to be found and appreciated.

    Great ending, I didn't feel like I was missing anything at the end, which I often do in my own poetry as I struggle to end sometimes, but this felt like the perfect time and way to end the poem, recapping that faith of being found and wanting to be found.

    Fantastic write guinea pig!

  • 8 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    I love this one so much (: Added to favorites (: Considering I also like the quote that you used as the inspiration for this makes it even more beautiful (:

    Everyone of us, at some point, has felt the urge to run away -- with the hopes that someone will come to run after us. We want to feel that someone out there cares, and that we are needed and we belong somewhere.

    I like the specifity... Like the time, and Sunday morning.. makes the poem more personal and more adorable, at least for me. I also like how the poem incorporates reality with its words, like how Earth dirties the people, while the people destroy the creation, etc. It makes me think that we will be lost in the confusions, ironies, and many other things in this world, but as long a you have each other, you will always be found.

    Beautifully penned (:

    --- MKKK

  • 8 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Great write. Always enjoyed reading your poems

  • 8 years ago

    by DanceDevonDance

    Love it

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