Comments : Memories (Pleiades)

  • 2 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Wow! Beautiful, Ms. Meena, beautiful! (: Good job with the form! Memories can really tear your heart out knowing that those moments cannot happen again.

    --- MKKK

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    You chose a sentimental topic that fits this adorable form very much. Beautiful diction and nice flow. Very enjoyable, Meena.

  • 2 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Well done. I like the last line. "With the memories left by you"

    I think that was a good way to end the poem. There's a sadness felt as I read this piece which is wrapped with the last line. I like it.

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Loving this form, might have to try it one day I get time to write. This write is not only creative, and done well given the rules, it is flawless and very moving. You have picked a topic that readers will be automatically in tune with and able to relate to well.

    "minutes eat away truth and dreams"

    this line really stood out to me because it just seems so true about how time can pass us by just like that, and when we lose someone, life can feel somewhat pointless, like we have no dreams left to live for without this person in our lives.

    Beautiful job.

  • 2 years ago

    by Timothy

    Nice work. You are a true poet.

  • 2 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    It's usual the way we feel sad in love when stuffs doesn't go according to our will. But here, the words, feelings, grief and expressions are totally different and highly. That's the best part of this poem. This kind of writing can really wins hearts.

    Unless any poet lost in the theme what he/she is writing, he/she can't give his/her best. I believe that for writing one should completely sink profoundly what he/she is writing about. That's what I'm viewing from you.

    My calendar of love filled with you-

    This line proofs that you must had been living with your love for a very long time. And all those time those two souls were one, filled with amazing graceful love. Due to that close adorable relationship the pain becomes worse after departure. So, it's true that past memories really effects tough on our soul.

    The pain of past memories can keep on killing the heart for many years. It's quite complex to get rid of it.

    Well done. Nice performance once again.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Meena
    This is both educational (I knew nothing of the form) and an absolute pleasure to read!
    Like an acrostic, this must be a hard form to adhere to, but you have done it with elegance and not a little flair.
    "My calendar of love filled with you" - wonderful.
    All the very best Meena,
    Ben