Black Ribbons (senryu)

by Meme   May 8, 2015


Untie the laced lines
you keep within, I'll stay through
all your shades of grey.

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  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a stunning little senryu, that says so much in (obviously) so little room as a good senryu always does!
    Well done and all the best,
    Ben

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    Opening your heart and soul and letting someone love you completely is something that is very difficult to do.

    Within this very short format, it is very difficult to pack a powerful message and Meme did that and much more here... its a touching poem about loving someone through the darkness and giving them hope... just beautiful!!!

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly Contest May 11th
    Judging comment:

    An elegant well written Senryu, it's that dark passion which insists to last, resonant word choice and internal rhythm. Very enjoyable.

  • 2 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    Judging Comment

    Although this poem is short due to the poetry style that it belongs to it was very nice to read a simple story plot in very few lines it's a wonderful read, held a lot of emotions and visuals. It was a great read.

    - Moria Bella Bair -

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    The imagery in this piece is completely stunning. Amazing write, well deserved of the weekly win

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks guys :)