I Want to write about you
And the way I feel when you are near by
But every time you are close to me
I feel like gazing into your eyes;
those hazel eyes,
that got me mesmerized,
lost in time, hypnotized,
And I cant....
I love this and know exactly what you meant by it!
I loved the rhythm to this poem most of all, I really felt like it already had a tune to it, like it was lyrics to a song, like the bridge or chorus part.
Really great flow and I like the ending line being on it's own, I think this emphasises a lot of frustration on the point that you cannot write about this person no matter how much motivation you have to do so.