Comments : John doe

  • 2 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    If my interpretation is correct this is an amazing idea.

    I think your talking from the doctors point of view during
    An autopsie.... Maybe a suicide through losing his loved one... Or maybe I'm being ti literal... Either way it's one of my favourites.... Nominated if I can..

    Your so talented

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      It has many interpretations!

      Thank you for the comment T :)

  • 2 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Great caption. Wornderful words. Beautiful poem.

  • 2 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    NOMINATED!!

    O M FREAKING G!!!

    A sad write Meme but i have to say a fantastic one o.O the tone of this piece is saturating and i wasbpulled in from your opening lines, really your word choice and format, everything is flawless. Wonderful write!

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thaaaaank you Ben :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Jamparnell

    Powerful

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks :)

  • 2 years ago

    by JaneDoeWrites

    Holy cow, this piece is seriously flawless. You did a PHENOMENAL job portraying these emotions! I think this write is relatable to a lot of other women (and men) out there.

    It is hard work loving someone who was broken by another before you. It is frustrating to be punished by a love that cannot be reciprocated. It is frustrating that we cannot blame them for how they are, and even more-so that we cannot change that about them. All we can do is love them for who they are, and hope that one day it is returned.

    The line "I felt the silence camping within" is a perfect metaphor for this.

    Amazing write, favorited. 5/5

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you sooo much :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Claire Morris

    I like this poem sooo much. It's really very good.

  • 2 years ago

    by JB Guancia Dormido

    WOW! very well constructed. Leaves me speechless. It's flawless!

  • 1 year ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    Adore the first line. So often we see without really seeing things. The use-age of half stitched smile makes me think that the smile is painted on and tightly held but not a real one.

    "Breathing but still asphyxiated " This was by far in my opinion the most powerful line and it stands out from the rest of the piece. It makes me think about how often we're dragged down by life and struggle to survive, in essence-painting on a smile daily.

    The next few lines paint the image of someone in a coma- wordless pleas, silence, lifeless body, imprisonment. Which again reinforces the idea of life bringing us down.

    I particularly love the last two lines, such intensity in that open ended question. Very powerful write.