Comments : Natural Instincts (Haiku)

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    I had to read this thoughtfully that's why I didn't comment at the first time.
    The words "beast" and "dove" were a bit confusing as I thought in the beginning that the poem is about the process of predatory, but it turned to be about something else :)

    You made google "Dove mating rituals", the female builds the nest, the male brings the food.... We "the females" always rock, don't we?

    Great job, Ingrid, very interesting Haiku.

    • 2 years ago

      by Ingrid de Klerck

      Thank you, dear Samia.
      I changed the title slightly, as I feel the wording was too confusing.
      My family has these birds as pets and to my utter surprise, the females are very promiscuous, so different to us, human females!

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ingrid,

    Lovely neat little package here...

    Grooming her feathers
    ^
    In three words you have painted a picture of a female bird preening herself. This form is about creating lasting images and you have done so in the first line.

    dove obeying nature's laws
    ^
    This line tells me which breed of bird. A dove - well there is all sorts of symbolism with this breed - biblical and of course a bird symbolizing peace. I do not think though this is the message you are portraying. This female Dove is acting as intended. Programmed by mother nature to preen and groom. Well, we know that there are necessary oils secreted from glads into the feathers to keep them healthy and to resist water. In this line I wonder what will be the 'ah ha' moment in the last line.

    mates with next in line.
    ^
    Alright, I was not expecting that. This line suggests that this grooming is a mating ritual. Next in line seems to mean that there are a line of male Doves waiting for similar attention. If that is so I am coming back in the next life as a Dove?

    Great little Gem Ingrid.

    (((hugs)))

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brought a smile to my face the end of this. Excellent little piece. Well done. And congrats on this week's HM!

  • 2 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Another short but well written piece, saying much, but in just a few words. Well done! Good writing.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You described a dove so well in a few words.I love doves and to me they are symbolizing peace.Elegant and sweet write

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Wow, a vibrant piece about a dove's course of action! This subject is so unique. Great job!