Comments : Bereft

  • 2 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Each verse in this poem is so well penned its hard to say which one stood out for me or which was my favorite because your use of language here gives the reader a very vivid images that while reading one can blend in with it. The last lines:

    but farewells can't reach
    those who bleed behind trampled flowers...

    ...like I do.

    ^^Ohh...I can just see those trampled flowers and because you have used these as a symbol of you, I can see, feel the trampled image of a heart been used and trampled upon then left to die. I always wonder whether flowers bleed but this image of your emotions linked with the flower makes it possible and heartfelt!

    Also the space you left between those lines and "...like I do" creates an impact one can sympathize as well as empathize with you...beautifully penned!

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Beautifully penned with some wonderful imagery throughout. Excellent piece and take care,
    Ben

  • 2 years ago

    by Cindy

    Mahal

    Your imagery you have used in this piece brings such vivid pictures to the minds eye.

    My heart belongs to you...
    still, you disappear
    like stardusts melting upon my skin.

    Your words are full of beauty yet the sadness drips from every line.

    Excellent job!
    Take care Cindy

  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    What a beautiful write and so well penned and each and every line so well expressed. I love flowers and I am sure they do bleed. Would love to see your poem win.

  • 2 years ago

    by ShravaniX

    The imagery is lovely. You have written quite a lot of poems with dandelions in them, haven't you? There is a huge emotional feel in the last three lines. Really like it.

  • 2 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Excellent write !!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Sooo beautiful. This poem is just very beautiful. The wording is so deep and lyrical.

    This is more like a 3D poem. Your closing words leave an impact especially with their opposition to the lines before them.

    Loved the feeling it gave me.

    The opening was very very catchy and shocking in some sense. As in very direct and gets you very curious.

    The rest of the stanzas were very creative. I loved this poem to death.

    Hope it gets to the front page. Also nice title. Love the word.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    I am in awe of your talent dear poet. Your use of poetic language is exquisite. The imagery and sense of sadness actually translates so I actually feel your message. Bereft is how I feel now.

    Excellent work.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    The imagery that this poem expresses is fantastic, and I enjoyed reading every line.
    Every line is packed with emotion, and longing, and I found it to be an enthralling write.
    Well done.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    You write such beautiful imagery and I can feel the emotion in this piece.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    You write such beautiful imagery and I can feel the emotion in this piece.

    Em