Comments : Fear knocks thrice...

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Wonderful write Michael. Never has onomatopoeia been put to such marvellous use! Scratch, bang, drip, creak used wonderfully to create a sense of - genuine - terror. I honestly didn't get this one till the last line. I love shocking last lines, as you know! "I think, with weapons too?"
    A scary concept indeed. noises and shadows in the night are something everyone has been afraid of at some point in their lives.
    Will nominate this tomorrow when I have some votes!
    All the very best,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Michael
    A wonderful piece for this time of year! I love all the nervousness leading up to the opening of the door.

    Love the ending
    Take care Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Gadfly

    "Like a moth to a flame I do what I must"
    You impressed me. Something hard to do nowadays.

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      ^
      Thank you, your words mean so much.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Michael, I am on my phone now, will come back later to comment properly on your newest gems!

    (((hugs))) xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Oh, you cracked me up, Michael!

    'I think, with weapons too?"

    Ha ha ha, priceless!!!!

    I loved the story, the format (really cool) and the way you build suspense.

    Well done, you!

    (((hugs))) xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Well you do have a way to create a scary moment, instill fear and then make the reader laugh out loud! I like how you have penned this write...it really takes the reader on a ride along with the writer...excellent!

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Mr Darcy! You should of been a comedien!
    Yet another poem of yours that has just cracked me up into laughter!
    Trick or Treat Mister? What a simply fabulous ending to a very funny poem! I loved it!

  • 8 years ago

    by J Nair

    Mr.Darcy, :))
    I am sitting here with this silly grin on my face, and it seems to stay put.
    Thank you soooo much for this lovely treat.
    I really loved all the sound effects and the art used --- my neck hair standing ALERT :))
    and the descending creaking stairs. Hillarious.
    And
    I could also relate to this poem not just because of the feeling of fear and darkness but the reaction that you displayed....
    The knocking urges me to open it,
    though my mind yells at me...

    NO, DON'T DO IT!!

    Like a moth to a flame I do what I must

    &...

    Open the door:

    Well that is exactly how i handle my fears ... I just have to face it and prove it wrong or else i will never be able to go back to sleep.

    Your sense of humour & suspense is awesome. You've got your finger on the pulse.

    Big Fan :))

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Ha, I loved this! The anticipating and way you formatted it made everything surreal and come alive for the reader. I was expecting a house intruder or maybe that you'd wake up from a nightmare. Great ending though :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Ah, the suspense!

    I could visualize your words, that was pretty cool.
    At the end, I found some humour. lol