Season's Challenge (Haiku)

by Ingrid de Klerck   Nov 13, 2015


Autumn gales play with
reeds along the riverbank--
breaks what does not bend.

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  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hello Ingrid. Thank you for checking my poems out and commenting on them. I love this short piece. Beautiful write!

  • 2 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Beautiful haiku!

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello my dear,

    Sorry for not commenting sooner.

    The title 'A season's challenge'
    ^
    This sounds both of mother nature and human nature. The challenge ellement being very human; forever trying to better ourselves or at least survive. Where as mother nature is left to fate. This title feel fate has a human hand. This is intriguing to say the least.

    The first sentence sets a vivid moving image and one that is apt. The strong winds that we are currently experiencing blowing across the land causing havoc and distruction. The reed bed sways left and right - much of it rooted firmly; but the threat of loss is inevitable.
    I also feel this force of nature resembles a recent human force of disruction: ISIS. This terroist group blowing a distructive wind across the world. I appreciate this meaning may not have been your intension, but perhaps your subconcious mind played a part?

    The last line, the twist: usually this line, a well known phrase goes like this:
    Bends what it does not break.
    ^
    To make it fit you remove the 'it', but more significant you swap the 'bend' and 'break' around. This changes the impact from soft to hard. This is what makes this line work so well. With such recent mother and human distruction the 'break' is more prevalent and the fallout felt across the world. How can we feel free when our homes and lives are at risk?

    Ingrid, this is to me a deeply complex poem and I commend you for being you and for sharing your wisdom and talent.

    (((Hugs))) xx

  • 2 years ago

    by Hellon

    I love the double meaning in this haiku Ingrid....how very fitting it is in today's current events.

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    It's amazing how the haiku can have the spirit of human nature at its best. I can fully imagine such experience here.
    I just wish you chose a brighter title... It's a gem, Ingrid.

    Thank you so much for sharing :)

    • 2 years ago

      by Ingrid de Klerck

      Thank you so much, dear Samia:)

      You are right, the title was chosen in haste and I will amend that now!

      Love and a hug,
      X Ingrid

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