The final slide (Alouette) (HM)

by Mr. Darcy   Feb 3, 2016


Swirling down the drain,
those dreams go again.
Into a porcelain hole
where the lot belongs;
the poems and songs:
Ejected, the poets soul.

The Alouette, created by Jan Turner, consists of
two or more stanzas of 6 lines each, with the following
set rules:

Meter: 5, 5, 7, 5, 5, 7
Rhyme Scheme: a, a, b, c, c, b

Inspired by Ben commenting on Meena Krish's poem: Weep Brown Eyes

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  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    A clever poem Mr Darcy, worthy of your pen.
    Interesting form and good flow.
    Well penned.

  • 8 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Judging comment:

    This is a new form to me, and Michael executed it quite well, a concise but powerful poem. I think everyone can relate this piece!

  • 8 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Judging comment:

    This is a new form to me, and Michael executed it quite well, a concise but powerful poem. I think everyone can relate this piece!

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Lovely little write and interesting form. I had a study of your rules and I think it seems like a possible candidate for me to attempt (not great with forms) but this one seems easier than some.

    The flow really is great, you have done well one that and the rhymes bounce off each other nicely too.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,
    I don't think I'm too far off the mark when I say I know where this one comes from and I understand your frustration completely. I'll leave that there.
    A great poem and very cleverly written - again, your knowledge of the forms is evident and also - and more importantly - you ability to execute them so well.
    Well done and all the very best,
    Ben

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