Jay,

Lovely to read a new piece from you and this is a cracker. SOMEONE NOMINATE! I am out of votes already!
The imagery, flow and content of this piece are spectacular and you have incorporated some very subtle but effective uses of alliteration, which I love.

All the very best,
Ben

Hello Jay,

This poem has much humour. I especially like the little boy using grandpa's walking stick as a trusty steed. A lovely image of childs play. I also like the description of fizzing pop- drinking so much your belly bulges. The best bit for me was the burping competitions. Oh what fun!

Thanks for the memories and the wonderful worded imagery.

Take care,

Michael

The title sums it up.

Hello Jay,

well done on you HM. A wonderful poem full of imagery and sentiment.

Excellent.

Take care,

Michael

Judging comment:

I love the slightly humorous narrative the author employed, it takes you from the stages of life in a relaxed manner that screams "life's not that serious" from the bit about the child playing with a cane, to the ending verse. Great write.