Comments : Life summed up!

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Jay,

    Lovely to read a new piece from you and this is a cracker. SOMEONE NOMINATE! I am out of votes already!
    The imagery, flow and content of this piece are spectacular and you have incorporated some very subtle but effective uses of alliteration, which I love.

    All the very best,
    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by J Nair

      Thank You soooo much Ben for your ever present support.

      Jay :)

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Jay,

    This poem has much humour. I especially like the little boy using grandpa's walking stick as a trusty steed. A lovely image of childs play. I also like the description of fizzing pop- drinking so much your belly bulges. The best bit for me was the burping competitions. Oh what fun!

    Thanks for the memories and the wonderful worded imagery.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by DarkLight

    The title sums it up.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Jay,

    well done on you HM. A wonderful poem full of imagery and sentiment.

    Excellent.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 1 year ago

      by J Nair

      Thank You Michael!

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Judging comment:

    I love the slightly humorous narrative the author employed, it takes you from the stages of life in a relaxed manner that screams "life's not that serious" from the bit about the child playing with a cane, to the ending verse. Great write.

    • 1 year ago

      by J Nair

      Thank you for the support .