Comments : If Tomorrow Comes

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Lucero,

    What wonderful free verse here that is beautifully laid out and an absolute pleasure to read. It flows wonderfully.

    My only advice is that "thumb" should be "thump" - thumb is what's on your hand!

    Brilliant writing and all the best,
    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Everlasting

      Haha thumbs up Ben

      I knew something didn't sound right. All fixed.

  • 1 year ago

    by Hiro

    You speak from the heart.

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I am pretty sure you like me are also a member of allpoetry . If not google Dirty Pretty
    The sand on a beach I assume is pure like your beautiful poetry. At first glance the word Poetry with an upper case P seemed out of place. Poetry is about beauty aa my mentor Gibran stated so it is not that hard for me to personify it." And if tomorrow comes
    that Poetry did not come
    like she did today"

    This to me shouts liberty

    not silently,
    not quietly,

    but loudly

    There are times when it seems not to be a blessing to be poor in spirit . I know I could be easily intimidated by you

    I would not change a thing now 5/5

    PS I had to look up promenade which fit so perfectly in this masterpiece

    • 1 year ago

      by Everlasting

      Yeah, I'm also a member of allpoetry. Actually this poem was inspired by a contest held by Andrew. I'm not sure if you know him.

      Thank you for your comment.

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is worthy of the front page in my opinion

  • 1 year ago

    by Karla

    Beautiful!Favourite.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Excellent write. Add to my favorite.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    excellent piece. I especially like the format.

    Well done on your win.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Lucero,

    Wonderful write that fully deserves the front page! Well done and all the best,
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Koan

    Truly a wonderful free verse!!! I love your layout and word choices, simply brilliant!
    Congrats on your win!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats on your well deserved win

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    The formation or rather the birth of a poetry and her inspiration! You have given poetry an elegant physique and I also like the way you have presented it...the shape of it gives a beautiful expression...well done and...Congrats on the Win dear :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Meena,

      And thank you everyone for reading.

  • 1 year ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I swear I thought I had commented on this poem. I am remiss.

    The words you use to describe poetry's progress (promenade, strolling) evoke a sense of quiet, reverie. She loses herself in the "soul of the sun." So profound!

    But your change-up "let her come . . . loudly" is masterful.
    Well done and well deserved win.

    • 1 year ago

      by Everlasting

      Haha I know the feeling of feeling like one has commented but turns out that either the Internet fails or that one was just daydreaming about it...(at least in my case)

      Thank you for your comment Mr. Larry

  • 1 year ago

    by silvershoes

    I thought I had commented as well, but turns out I commented as a sub judge, not on the actual poem. Anyway, I gave your poem 10 points and was extremely happy to see it on the front page for a week! Great writing.

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    "The piece dawned on me quietly at first, but loudly at the end; a powerful narrative that has slight nuances of it indicating that this is a piece about the author's muse, or perhaps a battle with writers-block. It's encapsulates the feelings that writers get, the gentle stream of inspiration, the every now and there flood of inspiration, and the overwhelming desire to express ourselves. This piece is extremely relatable, and is written beautifully!" (7 pts)

    Side note: While I was searching for this poem, I typed in "if tomorrow", and there were two immediate results, this 'if tomorrow comes', and the other was 'if tomorrow never comes', although it seems like nothing at first, it made me realize that your poems tend to be on the more positive side, and that speaks a lot about you!

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    This is a masterpiece! I am breathless
    Take care, Em