I love the idea of the air being heavy with change. I feel like you just put words to an emotion I was feeling and didn't know how to describe it, and while it seems simple, when in you're in the thick of it, and overwhelmed, it's hard to see it.
Loved this. Would be awesome if you recorded this one.
6 months ago
Oh hell yes!
This is SUCH a relatable write, very deep and atmospheric, it flows really nicely when read aloud and your word choice was spot on.
I don't know why but repetition can sometimes annoy me in a poem, but you used it perfectly here.