Comments : Just Like You

  • 1 year ago

    by Randhir kaur

    Loud enough..Nicely penned..Thumbs up...Very vivid..

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Spontaneity,

    it was so lovely to see a little red number by a poem of mine. It doesn't happen that much when you decide to stop posting. I know what you mean when you said, you haven't been in a commenting mood. Well, I am glad you did! :O)

    Now, here I am returning the love...

    The title 'Just like you' Although I read it, I was so gripped by your instant questioning that I forgot about it - this is good and I will reveal later...

    It could be said that there are lots of presumptions made, but I don't agree. Much of the time we live within ourselves, but when we spend time with others we see a reflection, our reflections. I will explain: Smiling is one of those facial expressions that shows happiness. I know they can be false, but when one sees a genuine smile we a smile back. Think of it this happens with babies. We copy one another and become experts at reading others emotions/ feelings.
    Where am I going Michael? Well, in your poem you speak of how someone else see you, how they feel about certain behaviours, even their judgements. Even if they hadn't expressed their inner feelings you would have seen their expressions during many interactions and/or altercations. Facial expressions of fear, disgust, horror, to name a few.
    This reflection has an impact and you have described this well. It makes a person insecure, makes them feel they need to hide behaviours for fear of rejections. It can be a self fulfilling prophecy - the more a person thinks they are bad and sees this reflected in others, the more they behave in a way that fuels this belief. Either in error, or in a rebellious way. Its a no win situation.
    The poems tells of a journey, where life is a struggle and a battle of inner demons and juggling relationships and wanting acceptance of others, but more importantly oneself.

    'What you cannot see, is someone who has
    gone through life with their own battle scars
    ....just like you'
    ^
    The way you end this poem is perfect after the self analysis and mention of pain and ridicule; it is almost like payback and a chance to reflect their behaviour right back at them.
    The last three words create a perfect loop; a complete circle of self discovery and awareness.

    I really enjoyed reading this poem and can imagine cathartic benefits.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Well, I think the majority of what I was going to say about this piece has already been said, so I will just say that I enjoyed reading this piece, and am glad to see this nominated. A well-written piece!

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging comment

    This poem by Spontaneity is breathtaking, true grit and emotion from the heart. she details her pain in every line with elegant word usage.

    The poem flows nicely and powerful expressions are structured in a way that is nice to read. Truly enjoyed this poem!

  • 1 year ago

    by Koan

    You have poured much sadness into this poem with a sprinkle of universal truth! Enjoyed the read, thx!

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Another powerful deep poem