Pendulum Swings in the Darkness

by Rob   Mar 22, 2016


She existed only in the imagination,
Of the one hundred thousand dead,
The path she walks is a twisted trail,
Paved with honorific denial and frightening dread...

She knocks on a door that seems hollow and cold,
And the only answer comes from within,
As the pendulum swings in the darkness,
In the forest it is happening again...

The forest secretes its clandestine myths,
A villainous emplacement for all those who prey,
Predicated by the evil inside them,
Another provocation of those they betrayed...

Charisma is no longer in the equation,
Caustic intentions is all that she needs,
There is only one resolution here,
The total of how many of them will bleed...

Seek not the temptation of a place in the darkness,
Have the knowledge you are already there,
The forest is not for the meek at heart,
You are in the darkness simply because no one cared...

No forgiveness for those who question the myth,
The spirits stand alone for your soul,
There is only one way you will leave here,
When you take your last breath you will know...

It is not wrong to desire the darkness,
But your walk in the forest has sealed your fate,
You knew there was something inside,
You want to run but it is far too late.

The silence of night is shattered by screams,
And suddenly everything has turned red,
Your curiosity brought you here,
And now here you are, on the ground dead...

And its over...

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  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comments:

    This poem by Rob, is dark and seductive! A delightful read this week.

    Rob has a wonderful flow and rhythm to his rhyme pattern and yet it also has a unique flare to it!

    I love how this poem starts off, unraveling secrets and twisted darkness as the poem unfolds... It reminds me of a lost love yearned for, dying from her twisted darkness... the nature tones are just an added uniqueness to this poem..

    I really love the ending.... it just brings the tension and sadness home! well done Rob!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank You so much!!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    When I set out to judge I don't mean to pick holes. But I feel I need to justify a lower score and my 4 point choice usually takes the brunt. Despite only receiving 4 points this poem was my third pick out of all the nominations. It is a lovely piece of atmospheric story telling.
    Very dark and very descriptive.
    It is also a comma fest.
    It is also grammatically correct. A comma at the end of each line, a capital letter begins each new line.
    However I feel it detracts from the poem.
    Ironically there is a comma missing in line 4 and line 20. Possibly line 26.
    If you are going to use them, then use them all.
    Personally I prefer to bin them. (I would probably bin the last line as well.)
    So I am scoring this 4 points for the narrative and imagery. 4 points.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Rob,

    You write so well. The rhyme, and imagery keep the flow throughout.
    There is a a real mysterious darkness within this piece which keeps me gripped from start to finish.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    This poem is shrouded in mystery, venomous emotions and dark setting which makes the whole read gripping and wanting more like a thirst! Excellent write and Congrats on the Win!

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank You so much!

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your win! Very dark, very good.

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank you so much!

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