Comments : Pendulum Swings in the Darkness

  • 1 year ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    I thought to read your poem....and I am mystified!

    Such a powerful, impelling write that just gripped me as I read it!

    Very well written and expressed.
    Well done!

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank you so much!

  • 1 year ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    P.s. I've nominated your poem for the weekly contesr! :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      :) Thank You!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I loved this intricate and blood thirsty poem.
    Very well written a dramatic and compelling tale

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank you so much!

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Congrats on the win Rob

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      OMG! Thank you!

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your win! Very dark, very good.

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank you so much!

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  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    This poem is shrouded in mystery, venomous emotions and dark setting which makes the whole read gripping and wanting more like a thirst! Excellent write and Congrats on the Win!

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank You so much!

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Rob,

    You write so well. The rhyme, and imagery keep the flow throughout.
    There is a a real mysterious darkness within this piece which keeps me gripped from start to finish.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    When I set out to judge I don't mean to pick holes. But I feel I need to justify a lower score and my 4 point choice usually takes the brunt. Despite only receiving 4 points this poem was my third pick out of all the nominations. It is a lovely piece of atmospheric story telling.
    Very dark and very descriptive.
    It is also a comma fest.
    It is also grammatically correct. A comma at the end of each line, a capital letter begins each new line.
    However I feel it detracts from the poem.
    Ironically there is a comma missing in line 4 and line 20. Possibly line 26.
    If you are going to use them, then use them all.
    Personally I prefer to bin them. (I would probably bin the last line as well.)
    So I am scoring this 4 points for the narrative and imagery. 4 points.

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comments:

    This poem by Rob, is dark and seductive! A delightful read this week.

    Rob has a wonderful flow and rhythm to his rhyme pattern and yet it also has a unique flare to it!

    I love how this poem starts off, unraveling secrets and twisted darkness as the poem unfolds... It reminds me of a lost love yearned for, dying from her twisted darkness... the nature tones are just an added uniqueness to this poem..

    I really love the ending.... it just brings the tension and sadness home! well done Rob!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Rob

      Thank You so much!!!!