This is a mesmerizing, vivid piece of poetry good sir!
You definitely have some strong talent in the world of writing.
I believe it can even be a song, the words just ooze with imagery. I love the opening stanza it grabs the reader right away leading them on a journey of top notch work. The surrounding whole of the crow was dark yet beautiful. Reminded me in a way of Game of Thrones a little, Crows - Men taking the black etc.
Talented piece, keep it up - I'll check more of your work out tomorrow, it's late here.
Thank you for giving it a read :) It was definitely on purpose. I tried to make it almost like a military march, but one sided. I didn't get it completely right, but that'll hopefully come with practice.
Haha it's not a poetic technique, I meant to the rhythm of a literal military march. To the beat of the snare and in a nearly emotionless robotic flow. I thought it would add more coldness to the humans vs nature theme (for the human side).
I love writing but I'm willing to bet that your knowledge of poetic techniques is leagues above my own. Lol I wouldn't know what half of them are - I actually had to Google anapest just then. I'd probably do well to brush up on those haha
Huh, pardon? Where is the nearly emotionless robotic flow. Haha I feel so much emotion there.
No worries. I also had to google what meter was when I discovered that on a few of my pieces I was writing with "a sing song rhythm." That's how I came to learn about poetic techniques by doing it first then wanting to know what it was that I was doing. XD It will come in handy if you learn more about them ( I have a lot to learn too). But it's always better to just go by the sound (whatever it is that you feel and hear at the moment of writing) than to pay attention to the poetic technique.
All the best. Do keep on writing when the feeling to write comes.