Comments : The writing's on the wall... (Senryu)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well worded, Michael, and my sentiments exactly!

    (((hugs))) xx

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Another excellent senryu, Michael - you have hit a real purple patch with them recently.
    As for the sentiment - it could be uncomfortably close to the truth...

    All the best

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, I normally don't get involved with politics but this is really good and very telling.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Micheal

    What a fab write, hit the nail on the head with so few words.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    When it comes to politics I prefer to hold my peace. You did an excellent job with this write. So much said in a few words. Take care

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    I hope not............ I personally am embarrassed that man is running.

    Ok onto the Senryu- It's a wonderful piece and you do have a gift to tell it all in 3 syllabic lines, love this!

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    I know you're a bit of a rebel with syllable count so I'm not sure if I should mention that I think you have 6 syllables in line one?

    A soiled placard blows

    ^^^

    is it an accent thing..not sure but I count two in the word soiled...so-iled.

    If you want a perfect count just drop the "A" it's really not necessary anyway.

    Apart from that the topic is very very current and...I enjoyed it without a doubt!

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Thank you Hellon,

    you are quite right, I do like to push boundaries from time to time. But, in this case I checked on the sites 'Rhymes' tab and it counted 1 x syllable. I agree though that it is debatable. And we know where I stand on that subject:

    Firmly on the
    ---FENCE---

    Take care and thank you for your comment.

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    No..you are correct, of course soiled has only one syllable...with my accent I say soy-eld and..knowing your somewhat rebellious nature towards syllable count you just threw me slightly :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Lot of emotion and visuals in a small box