Comments : Fireflies

  • 1 year ago

    by Belle

    It's nice to see a different view of catching fireflies. Thank you.

  • 1 year ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    This is really amazing and superb! Am just not that fond with the ending part, it just kind of threw me off, but I definitely love everything about this. Beautifully written! Will sure be reading this over and over again!

    --- MKKK

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    This is just beautiful

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Excellent 5*****

    I have a piece similar to this, but it's more on describing how fireflies form and dancing with them...

    Back to your piece ...This so captivating I can't take my eyes of it till the end. .. I can imagine how eager you are to catch one.
    *****
    Begging mothers
    for empty mayonnaise jars
    Hurriedly poking holes
    with the ice pick into each lid
    Like banshees, screaming
    we file out into twilight
    Dad's fishing net swooping through the air
    grasping at flickering light.

    For a few moments,
    stars have fallen to earth
    So we gather as many as possible,
    Lining our dressers with nature's nightlight.

    Misinterpreting their Morse code
    for an evening of fun.
    *****

    Excellent...

    Gel