Comments : Birth

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Britt, that challenge was truly hard to choose from.

    I liked this when I read it like the rest of the poems, they were all magical in their own ways.

    There's a cloud of heaviness
    wrapped around her heart,
    a non-pregnant pause lingers
    among the bellies of the forgotten,
    and she dips her toes in riverbeds
    as a reminder of a refreshment.
    This opening is really magical and speaks of a burden on the heart possibly be wise of what earth is becoming with all the fighting and deaths around us. I like the imagery of this lady dipping her toes in the river just to feel a sense of refreshment, some purity against her.

    There's stones overturned now
    covered in moss, much like
    lost smiles and quiet tales never told -
    without little ears to soak them in,
    these efforts feel pointless.
    I like the moss covered stones representing lost smiles and tales never told because it's like they are keeping our secrets that we have lost our smiles and forgotten to tell the tales even if we wanted to.

    She finds her comfort in the rolling sound
    of rocks on that riverbed she sinks into,
    a hushed moment of silence
    for the unborn, the emptiness
    and a minute of grieving,
    before she focuses on the sunshine.
    Love the ending. Imagery again is spot on.
    I love how this lady (who I now believe to be mother nature herself) is grieving for the inborn because of what is happening to her bt through it she will shine through again, hopefully.

    A truly inspiring piece. Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A lovely visual representation of nature at its best. There is nothing more refreshing (other than drinking water of course) than dipping your toes into a cool river or stream in the Summer. Wriggling toes in the water and touching the moss covered stones. Brings back memories of my childhood.

    Although portraying the beauty of flowing water it also portrays sadness of loss a child unborn that moment of grieving.

    Sunshine and water have a powerful tug on our souls.

    Milly x

  • 1 year ago

    by cassie hughes

    This was one of the poems I voted for in the challenge. I loved the imagery you use throughout and thought it depicted mother nature so beautifully. A great write :)