Comments : Emily Abstracted

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    It seems that that's where I'm heading... can't help but try to not let that happen to me.

    I enjoyed the read.

    • 1 year ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Luce, you are incapable of this situation. You sing your existence in writing as well as in the infectious laughter with which you punctuate your speech.

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Larry, this is an awesome write! I love the story you wove about this woman-almost invisible to the world yet almost a superhero in her own poems. Really cool!

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Larry,

    A well told poem that most of us can relate to, even if this is an amplified version. Although having thought about it being a member of a buzzing poetry site doesn't fit. Lol

    Great story of a superhero type persona; where by day she disguises herself, making her image merge into the society background. Then each night she removes her spectacles, loosens up and shakes out her hair, pouts in slow motion for the camera, before sitting at a writing desk.

    An enjoyable and well written poem.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by nourayasmine

    Wow wow wow.

  • 1 year ago

    by nourayasmine

    Why can't we nominate on Saturdays!? UGH.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Larry, such a sad story of a person going unnoticed.

    You description and imagery is wonderful

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    Basically a human being who is unnoticed by the world and by the surrounding she is in. Yet she puts herself inside each of her writing and makes her self noticed by everyone and everything-been invincible by been the woman she wants to be.

    A relate-able write by all...it takes me back to the past..touching.

  • 1 year ago

    by Abed

    Fantastic write

  • 1 year ago

    by Deana

    As you read, you can feel the existence of this very interesting lady. The reader becomes a part of the write! well done.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Larry,

    I absolutely loved this - well done, a good write.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Larry congratulations on your win :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Congratulations on your well deserved win. Excellent write. Sorry didn't get a chance to comment before. Very insightful portrayal of an unnoticed woman. Loved the story with the reveal that she may not be dynamic in her life but she is very much so in her poetry. Take care Milly x

  • 1 year ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Thanks to you all, not simply for the congrats, but for the feed-back comments. They are invaluable and appreciated.

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Congrats on the win Larry

    very much deserved

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Larry, congratulations on your win! Well done!

  • 1 year ago

    by silvershoes

    I pictured Emily Bronte. Exquisite poem. You created an entire human being, interesting and complex in all her simplicity.

    • 1 year ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      I actually wrote the poem and then went back when I realized her name had to be Emily.

      Thank you!

  • 1 year ago

    by Fan Angeleo

    She has a keyboard which makes no sound
    her speakers are always off;
    she has foam soled shoes,
    wears plain cotton dresses
    that never rustle when she walks.

    This captured me.

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    Glad this won...otherwise I may have missed it because I've been "Jamesinaing" once again :) I wonder about the Emily thingy because when I read it my first thoughts were Eleanor as in Eleanor Rigby, it just so reminded me of this very sad person that The Beatles portrayed many years ago. So glad it was a winner and therefore was highlighted for me to find...Congrats on your win...very well deserved...

    • 1 year ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Thanks, Hellon.
      I passed a young woman in the hall who was closing her office door slowly & quietly. When she saw me she softly said "I'm sorry" for no apparent reason. Then she left hardly leaving an impression. I went back to my office and wrote the poem. Later, I posted it without a single edit. Even then the only change I made was to name her after I read it online.

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    Congrats on the Win!!

  • 1 month ago

    by C Cattaway

    Only just found this. I was drawn to it by the title, of my daughter's name. What a beautifully unassuming piece. Glad I read it ;-) x