Comments : V

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Wow, this is really heavy stuff and so emotional.

    I'm not sure if you do it purposefully or not but the structure of the piece is like waves and I think it's great you did this even if you weren't meant to because it ties in with the lady going to the sea at the end.

    Take care, Em

    • 1 year ago

      by Augustus Black

      Thanks Em, Yaa! You are truly correct. And I also like the last segement actually, it's looks like a slide.

  • 1 year ago

    by Rsan

    What a very heart felt piece of writing you have here.And the imagery is just as great as well for thats what made this poem stand out.

    Excellent work

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    As below, this is a powerful piece with some wonderful imagery.i love the layout of the poem too - very pleasing on the eye.

    Take care,
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    I like writers that push the boundaries and explore new areas. This poem tells a sad story in a way that visually enhances it, to my mind anyway.

    Rape is hard enough to write about, but you've managed to describe it in such a way that the reader feels her physical and emotional pain. The suicidal ending is just like the slide down to a dark abyss.

    A good write.

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by Ren

    Beautifully written and full of emotion.
    You are able to describe such a painful topic with a beautiful structure and an intense, almost haunting imagery.
    Very well done!

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hey Augustus,

    Sorry this one skipped my eyes. ...

    A really sensitive topic but you wrote it delicately. ..A sad and forlon write. .. The layout also is exceptional. ...

    5/5

    Gel

    • 1 year ago

      by Augustus Black

      Thank you very much, you don't need to be sorry.

  • 11 months ago

    by Kasie

    Very emotional and powerful piece.
    It is horrible and terrifying to go through something like this. I could feel the pain and shame of one's self while reading this. No one deserves such trauma.

    Once again very emotional and great work.

    • 11 months ago

      by Augustus Black

      Thank you very much. I'm agree with you. It's very vital to be alert in this filthy generation.

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    AB... This is a wonderful write. As Mr. Darcy points out... Rape is a heavy topic to write about and I loved how the story was told... It's not conversational nor narrative more of highlighted the devastating effects of what was done. A great write here.

    • 3 months ago

      by Augustus Black

      Hey, Mossgirl

      Thank you very much for reading and have a nice day.