Michael, another beautiful write from you yet so sad because of the ending but it happens and even more so now because people are becoming much more greedier.

Great imagery of rain falling like tears.

Em

Ok..I know what the loop part means (well I should really) but what is the fib part? I had a suggestion for altering your layout but..it may obstruct the 'fib' part so...what is fib?

Hello Michael

Loop/fib/fib/loop/loopy/lies.....:(

I give up, I tell you.

Anyway, I like this poem, even if the form confuses me somewhat!

I particularly like the line "eyes that ruptured when I saw you"

Well done on this and all the best
Ben

Very funny Ben, but you can blame Mark for his experiment inspiring me.

The trouble is, you'll write a bloody triple, Loop/fib/fib/loop/loopy/lies..... now!!!

Oh no, Michael - it will be an accomplished crown of the buggers, lol

In truth, it really won't be.....

Michael, beautifully written and oh so sad-quite the "ouch" moment, what a neat format! Take care-Brenda

Neatly done with a real punch at the end.
Never heard of fib before but then, we are all here to learn are we not. :)

Michael, I really like this. So elegant, unique and packs a real punch line at the end.

Cannot believe it but these things happen and probably daily. I like how you describe the teardrops' being like rain because the rain doesn't seem to stop here lol. I hope this isn't literal though.

Great write as always.
Em