Prickly Pear

by Melissa   May 31, 2016


Your love, like cactus fruit
its tiny teeth sharp and taunting,
needling the flesh of my soul

you hide behind bold hues
and a spiny point of view,
failing your tenderness

but there's nothing sweeter in nature,
I've tasted its core,
my tongue dribbling succulent sips
of slipped slurs and
sappy sentiments

so I will gather myself beneath moonlight
and pluck petty prickles,
like a woman stupid in love

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  • 1 year ago

    by RainbowSlider

    What wonderful thorns of love.

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comment:

    Just Brilliant!

    This nature poem has taken on a life of it's own and I truly enjoyed this piece.

    Melissa has such a creative and elegant way of expressing herself within poetry.
    The metaphoric tone within nature allows the reader to soar in different angles. Starting from the title to the last line. Just lovely!

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    Melissa has written something short and sweet this week that I enjoyed reading. It is one of those poems that reads and feels like a 'proper' poem. As I was reading it I instantly knew that this was in my top 3. Nature is there all around us and everywhere in our daily lives. Those who choose to stop and take a moment can produce stuff like this. Stanza 3 goes alliteration happy, which I applaud. Stanza 4 hints at a turn in the tone and a reality check all in one. Nice imagery, short sharp stanzas, nice write. 10 points
    **

  • 1 year ago

    by Maher

    I really liked this one. The title got me - I love prickly pears. The alliteration used made me start to crave them, a good choice of words there. Just the right length overall and really tells a good story. You've engaged quite a few senses in this poem which is something great and is what I believe the aim of poetry should be. Awesome work and thanks for sharing it with us :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like how you have turned the pear into someone you just simply can't be without! You have made a simple fruit so uniquely different and wanting!

    Congratulations on the Win!

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