Comments : Drink sensibly (senryu)

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Amen to that sista! So true-

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks Brenda :)

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Agree Em!
    Still doesn't stop people though! :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Course it doesn't! Thanks for commenting

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Em

    Your senryu really are becoming more and more accomplished. However, this will not stop me thoroughly enjoying a nice glass (or two) of red in front of the tv tonight. (okay, three maybe) :)

    Great stuff,
    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks for commenting Ben. I was talking of the alcoholics though :)
      Enjoy your wine, I might join you haha!

  • 1 year ago

    by GB

    I see a poetry form here!

    Glad you are writing more of these and the message is just profound and so true, excellent job :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Red Yoshi

    Em,

    You always make the reader think and pick apart your poem this one is no different. From the get go:

    The title : It definitely speaks for itself. You are speaking of something that can make you impaired, aka alcohol. I like it because it speaks about the poem as a whole.

    Right off the bat you say alcohol abuse, which quickly is known to be a killer of anyone. But my thoughts as tbe reader are, this could have happened to the author or someone the author knew. This is definitely very relatable.

    Over time itwill lead to failure, which is painful and sad for the person involved. I once suffered from alcohol abuse to i fo know this feeling well. Vital organs, liver, heart, lungs. All could be damaged from alcohol.

    This poem could have a multitude of meanings of why you wrote it. Maybe a note to yourself, a note to a friend that you are worried about, a psa sort of thing. This is why i love your poems, you always leave the reader guessing.

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks so much James. Tbh, this is about my step-dad he drinks way to much and quite recently he has been having bad episodes so having tests for his liver!! :(