Petal pulling

Thanks for sharing such a heartfelt, personal, and interesting poem. I love your word usage with the petals, "But your mistress was
drink and drugs." . . . "I'm done pulling petals.
He loves me... "

Hello Brenda,

This poem reminds me of one of mine: Little Missy. I used petals, in a love me, love me not way.

Anyway, back to your poem:

The poem is a love stories, or should i say a series of love stories. It is an honest account of your life and how love if often unlucky. Using the age old method of 'pulling petals' creates a rhythm within the poem as your love life unfolds.

As the poem stands it is heartfelt and it seems a true account. My challenge for you is to have another go, but this time relive the disappointment, feel the anger and frustration. Use these feelings to conjure up dark metaphors and similes, like thunder, poison, darkness, scarlet women of the night. If you can do this, this will add powerful imagery and emotion. Once the reader feels this your happy ending, which you can also embellish will shine like a sun burning through the dark clouds.

If and when you feel like attempting this, let me know and I will help if you like.

Take care,

Michael

"I'm done pulling petals."

^^I like the whole verse but adored this line, I like your style and you manage to turn real stories we live everyday to very neat poetry. Lovely read, Brenda.

Wow, this was an intense read. You found the perfect way to describe such difficult situations with a sort of maturity and acceptance that only comes from years of experience. Thanks for sharing such a personal journey. I'm glad that you found a happy ending.

I really like the twist on the old cliche of 'he loves me, he loves me not'. Really well done!