Pen's need our hands or the ink will never dry...

You know Im old school with formed poetry- but you are the one to pull off a modern senryu and make me like it!

This piece reminds me of the switcheroo days, when I started seeing your creativity take new heights- I was so excited!!

Now, im nestled in my jammies, reading this poem and saying to myself, she did it again- love this!!

You are always trying new things and stepping over boundaries... and you make it work...

this is a favorite for me!!

This is beautiful, Ms. Lucero! I love this so much! (: Added to favorites.

--- MKKK

Well done on this modern senryu, Everlasting. It's my understanding that the rule is actually 17 or less and not actually in any certain order necessarily? 17 here with a 4, 8, 5 pattern.

Well done on this.

SL

Beautifully multilayered, Luce.
First, the connection between "wobbles" and "yearning" is symbiotic in that taken together the verbs imply sentience on the part of the pen as well as a dependency upon human intervention.
I agree with your choice on line break; these particular forms are much better when each line contains a completed thought or phrase.

Little and carrying weight.
lovely piece.

This is a remarkably stunning write, I especially love how it captures the current lack of stability around the world as well as feelings that writers understand and experience quite often. The lack of punctuation, while stylistic, disappoints me greatly. Explaining that it is a modern senryu got me excited for rule breaking, or modern style choice as well as a modern wording. Unless there is something else to the modifier of modern that I am not realizing, in which case, please enlighten me, I am always up for learning more about such a wonderful craft.

5/5 from me. I truly enjoyed the versatility here.