Her Garden at 6:00 am. (Haiku)

by GB   Jul 12, 2016


Her Garden at 6:00 am.

Wafted by the breeze
another daybreak was born-

the scent of Jasmine.

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  • 5 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Ohhh. This is beautiful! I love this, I love haikus.

  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    Despite the creative format, this piece was the most captivatingly nonheartbreaking piece I found this week. No pun intended, but it was a much needed breath of fresh air amongst a terrible time. While I appreciate capturing history on the page for future poets, historians, and other various souls to come, there is a point when that sorrow becomes too much to read at once. Especially coming from so many different views, so this piece (which was written with an incredible sense of imagery) was able to bring me to something at least slightly comforting. It was able to show me love and beauty in the world around me that is shrouded by an unstoppable force of chaos right now, and undoubtedly will be again. I love how Jasmine is capitalized, which gave me the illusion "She" has a name of Jasmine, or is often represented by Jasmine, which is a creative take I have not seen utilized here in a while. Even if this was not the author's intention, it was a nice touch, as was the dash after born, I have to say I have not seen many haiku styled pieces that are punctuated so... liberally? Informally? Imperatively? Honestly, I'm not sure what word fits best or if any of those three are capable of capturing the essence I mean to convey. Anyway, to make a long story short, this piece was phenomenal and just what PnQ needed

  • 1 year ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well done, Samia!

    I so love the scent of Jasmine, the heavy and sensual nature that always creates such a mysterious atmosphere. Love the choice of words, as also the title that adds greatly to the feeling you tried to create with this small verse.

    Love, Ingrid xx

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Samia, just lovely! I do love the scent of Jasmine...well done!

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a beautiful little haiku. "wafted" - what a great word and one not used enough, I've decided! Not a word wasted here and the title works perfectly.

    SL

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