Comments : See You in October

  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Andrea,

    I will deal with the end of this brutally honest piece when I get there, but I am going start at the beginning.

    I've known for some time now
    that writing has given me the strength
    to breathe, will to keep going,
    clarity to survive and share.

    ^^

    All good here; writing is therapeutic for you and certainly is for me and many others on this site. It is an outlet that we so desperately need sometimes. You, though, seem to have needed it even to 'breathe'. But what gives? Next stanza.

    Knowing struggles linger
    like a slow, smoldering
    brush fire, denial allowed
    me to ignore the smell of
    smoke.

    ^^

    Smoke is a warning of an altogether more dangerous problem: fire. Just because we are aware that we suffer with issues, doesn't mean we should ignore the symptoms of potentially devastating ones.
    *Quick point: 'smouldering' with a u.

    Questions would fly through a room
    on a day when I wasn't quite strong
    enough to answer, waiting for nightfall-

    I would answer questions alone in my
    room as the moon witnessed confessions
    of a broken down soul.

    ^^

    I will take these together as they tie in with each other. I love the personification of the moon here and your acknowledgement of that being the only thing you can confess to - your love of nature is mixed up in this, I dare say. Odd, though, as most people who are suffering dread the dark; not so here, it seems.

    As the reader, you witness my ability
    to make darkness beautiful, death
    comforting, gutted pain look
    like a sparkling, wintry nature scene.

    ^^

    An open address to us, the reader. As pretty as words can sound and as metaphorical we can make the demons sound, the darkness is still there and it's much uglier than a beautiful line on the page.

    I no longer wish to hide within metaphors
    and it's time for me to put down my pen,
    explore this darkness of mine in ways
    I never dreamed I would do.

    ^^

    Now we reach the crux of the issue. You are, temporarily, tired of wrapping your problems up in metaphor and gift wrapping them for others' 'viewing pleasure'. You seem to want to deal with them a different way for the time being.

    For now, I want to thank you for reading
    my heart, be comforted in knowing-

    When Autumn sets in,
    the Maple Tree will blossom
    with new shades you have
    never seen before-

    ^^

    A thank you and a goodbye for now? or at least in terms of writing but a promise that when the Maple blossoms again, it will do so with new shades - stronger ones perhaps?

    Thank you for reading
    I'll see you again when
    the final leaf falls....

    ^^

    It has been an absolute pleasure reading and - if this is literal and it may not be - do not be gone long. You are a treasure on this site.

    SL

  • 9 months ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Lovely poem here! Writing will always be a remedy, but once in a while it's okay to take a time out and focus on some other things. I'll see you in October. (: Haha. Take care.

    --- MKKK

  • 9 months ago

    by Em

    Aww Andrea this has had me weeping.

    Hope you're not gone long if it's literal, you'll be missed.

    Em

  • 9 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    I'm not leaving the site my friend's, I'll be on daily to read and comment, just taking a break from writing :-)

  • 9 months ago

    by Poetess

    Glad you're not leaving. Will still miss your poetry!

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    Andrea, I will miss you immensely, your writing is so incredibly beautiful. I understand though, we all need to take a step back now and again and draw strength. Rest, dear lady, we'll see you back in the fall. Hugs! Brenda

  • 9 months ago

    by hiraeth

    We'll wake you up when september ends.

    lol, glad you're sticking around though :)

  • 9 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Maple Tree. I love your work, but understand the need to have a break every now and then.
    Just know this site is full of support and friends to help whenever / wherever you need it. A very sad piece indeed, but lovely way to "depart" all the same.

  • 9 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Andrea,

    I can recommend taking a break - its harder than you think, but it will release time; time to pursue whatever you like. Personally, I am an all or nothing guy, so I had refrain from logging on as it was too damn tempting to comment or write a little ditty.

    All the best my friend. ((hugs)) xx

    Michael

  • 9 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Andrea, as always beautifully portrayed. Sorry that you are leaving and look forward to reading your words again in the Fall. Take good care of that imaginative and talented brain. Milly x

  • 9 months ago

    by GB

    You will be much missed :)

    Enjoy your break and comeback safe.

  • 9 months ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Don Juan's constant harangue to Carlos Castaneda was that he wrote too much to actually be able to learn the Yaqui way of knowledge.

    Occasionally we must step away from the pen and truly experience what we are all about.

    Good luck, see you on the other side.

  • 9 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats on your win and absolutely beautiful poem. Take care

  • 9 months ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Syrup,

    I get it.

    This is amazing, Effing amazing.