Comments : Jigsaws Of The World

  • 1 year ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    We need to chat my friend

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Holy Crap......Nominated.

    This poem is a perfect showpiece (for want of a better expression) of why your poetry is amazing.

    I love the meter, the spacing and punctuation controls the reader perfectly walking them through the ideas and process in this piece.

    I also love the directness too, often we can (especially me) have a tendency to make things complicated to try and state exactly what we mean and often , me personally, can actually OVER express which detracts from the overall msg.

    I love your word choice here too...... they just slip off the tongue and as a result you rhymes flow like silk on glass, my favourite rhymer on PnQ.

    "Each piece is placed with care and glee

    from those who do seek desperately

    to see the final picture gleam;

    from innocence, we see our dreams"

    ^^^^^^^ this right here......GENIUS!!!

    when we are uninhibited we can see the world for what it is, and put ourselves in a place where we can realise our dreams, hopes and potential.

    Great Job SL

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    I totally agree with Ben.
    Pure genius write as always and very smooth.
    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well done on another fantastic piece Sir L

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Thank you, everyone

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Just beautiful! A lot of thought to pause over neatly tied in this lovely poem. Well done Sir L-

  • 1 year ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    *I will attempt

    Wonderful and inspirational piece, great job Sir L!

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautifully written, Wonderful flow and unusual but brilliant view of the world. Another outstanding poem. Milly x

  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    Personally some of the rhythm here feels too forced, there's just a sense of disconnect between some of the ideas and what is actually said. However, I made sure to preface this with personally, because that could merely come from my connotations and interpretations.

    I enjoy how you made this write personal and yet still so open to interpretations. The unique perspective you show here really adds a nice dimension and a clear voice that defines you as a writer (at least in my eyes) and I love pieces that are so great at capturing that.

    Anyway, awesome write. Very interestingly penned.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for your thoughts - greatly appreciated.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Really like this poem and the view on life it gives.... life is a bit of a jigsaw isnt it?! :-) lol.

    Very well written :-)