Just another rambling

by hiraeth   Aug 25, 2016


' in the mist of august -

why is it that your name rises
to my throat bringing mayflowers
signaling a momentary cataclysm
of calamity?

i buried you for monotony
five fortnights ago,
and on the third,
i made amends with your ghost.

in introspection i drowned,
searching for a life preserver
to cling onto but found islands of
truths woven into amnesic fabrics:

i am only meant to exist in passing,

relationships smolder because
i am not meant to tend to it,

instead I am meant to gather the tinder,
and to kindle it with soft words,

murmuring hope.

i am your fleeting salar de uyuni -
your temporary something.

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  • 3 months ago

    by Sai

    I don't think you fully understand what constitutes a "rambling". When I ramble, it's incoherent, messy and it's definitely not pretty like this, just like any other normal person's would. Seriously though, reading this is like having your cup of tea on a rainy 2am or a sweating glass of beer under a summer sky, it depends on your poison of choice I guess. Also, I wish I wrote the final verse first.

  • 1 year ago

    by Skyler

    "Your temporary something"

    That hangs in the air, like the final refrain in an empty music hall.

    Congratulations on the win.

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    There is much more in this rambling then just rambling. I can hear the heart been tired not taken for what its worth, rather its taken for granted or for when someone needs you for their gain...sad..

    I like how you introduced the reader "in the midst of august" for you have set the moment for us. Now as we all know names should be capitalized yet you did not capitalize the month "august"-which can only mean that this month is not significant to you for it holds no special moment just the same thing that has happened yet again.

    in introspection i drowned,
    searching for a life preserver
    to cling onto but found islands of
    truths woven into amnesic fabrics:

    ^^This stanza stood out for me and the imagery here really tugs at the heart for it shows the depth of your unrecognized feelings.
    Also all the "i am" isn't capitalized when it should be but in terms of poetry you are not giving yourself importance for the other person does not see you as important...?

    i am only meant to be exist in passing,

    ^^Sorry I just can't come in terms with the word exist in this sentence...have read it couple of times yet am stuck. Maybe its that "not important me" which you want to project.

    All in all a a sad write with such depth and imagery. Congrats on the Win :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your win!

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well done on the win!

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