Comments : Perhaps You Were

  • 2 years ago

    by ether

    This is unusually beautiful. I like the theme and layout, your style is fragmented at first glance, but easy to read once you start. Well written, as usual.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Your writing always soothes and mesmerises me, Mahal. You have a beautiful, hypnotic way with words and description that I truly envy.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!!

    Em

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    Congratulations on the win

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Wonderfully stunning. It felt like I was being carried along atop one of your dandelion seeds.

    Well done and take care,

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Enchanting and leaves to wonder: unrequited love or lost love? Thanks for sharing this beautiful write!

  • 2 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the emotions all rolling and coming together to pour upon the page even upon the reader...touching writes Daishel...I really hope you are okay, take care.

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This is a beautiful poem! The elegant wording is mixed with nature tones, singing a true melody of emotions.

    The beginning stanza sets the scene full of metaphoric brilliance! I can see vividly the memories of a friendship perhaps, very touching.

    The loss of a friend or loved one echos through this poem and as sad as it is, its so darn beautiful!

  • 2 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Judging Comment:

    There's a certain haunting beauty to this poem, it's riddled with cruel realizations and a sense of this ambitious love. The mixture of well-chosen metaphors and pacing of this poem has a certain synergy. Interestingly enough, although Chopin admired Beethoven, Beethoven was not aware of Chopin due to the age difference and just because of circumstances (if I recall correctly Chopin just started his career a bit after Beethoven's death). This tidbit paints the ending in a different light, and solidifies the theme of unrequited love. I must admit that I have never stumbled across the piece "Liebesleid" and after listening to it, I really think that this poem reflects the essence of that piece extremely well. There's so many little things stitched into this poem that works really well, and for that reason alone, I consider this a masterpiece.