Comments : Apples That Float Away

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    It sounds like you are having a harsh time. Its always aroumd death we question our lives and our legacys. Beautiful poem. It was well written, great imagery and sad.. :(

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Sir L what a sad yet meaningful piece.
    As Naomi said when we are grieving we question what is right in the world and here you have it.

    You know if you need an ear i have 2.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    What a beautiful poem so visual and yet very sad. Very moving especially the last line "The ropes that tie my fragile raft and float away". This poem is absolutely amazing. You are very gifted. Milly xx

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Such a deeply written poem. I agree with Naomi, sounds like you are having a harsh moment in your life. It is during those times when we question all that is around us. You wrote from the heart, if that heart needs friends that's what we are here for-well done-

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi sir Lance,

    what can I say? this is another masterpiece from you so deep yet well described.

    my favourite stanza----->

    To breathe in woe and then bemoan the thunder clouds,
    Can bring no kind of sympathy or peaceful rest.
    The storms that we amass we then must blow away
    And tie our hearts upon the setting sun out west.

    voted ***** stars for this

    have a blessed day

    Gel

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Brenda, Gel, Milly - thank you all for your time reading this and your thoughts.

  • 1 year ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Well done SL, I agree with all the others, you are talented by the way!

    Nominated!

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    Lovely piece. Ben.

    I'm glad to see your name instead of SL. XD

  • 1 year ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Piercing and introspective. Choices reflected upon in advance are much better in retrospect.

    "Are apples truly rotten on this gnarly tree -
    Can birds not perch upon the branches just as well?"

    Sometimes the crop left on the branch, though blemished, is still serviceable. The maiden whose youth is ebbing is still the most beautiful one has ever been with.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for your time, Larry; your comments are always so precise and perceptive and I love reading them.

      Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A sad write Ben... that is well expressed.

    Hope all is well.

    Take care...

    ~ Olwin.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    A very worthy won. Congratulations

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, congratulations on your win! Well deserved front page write! You always pull so much out of your writes.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ben,

    this is truly a wonderfully written piece. I am actually sitting here speaking this out loud - the cats think I am mad - well I am, so they are quire right!

    Congratulations!!!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Michael. You may have noticed that each line is 12 syllables. I wanted to try a syllable count I'd never written in before and I think it gave it a different feel.

      Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I did notice the extra syllables and wanted to comment on them, but decided not to.

    You always give us extra with your poetry!

  • 1 year ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Spellbounding story and amazing word play. We tend to create our on storm clouds, wishing for better days. The grass is always greener on the other side.

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This poem screams of fall, the rising
    Of emotions, and the pure luster of life.
    I was tossed between meaning, but it touches the reader. Ben has that ability with his writing, well done!

  • 10 months ago

    by Ren

    Mesmerizing and a joy to read, as always, Ben!

    "The ropes that tie my fragile raft and float away"...just...wow.

    Congrats on the win!

    Take care,
    Ren

  • 9 months ago

    by Kaimeyo

    I needed to read this amazing

  • 9 months ago

    by ddavidd

    The language of this as always is sublime.

  • 8 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Even a master artist could not paint on canvas so clearly the images that you portray in words. Another wonderful piece

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