Comments : I'll continue being me...

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Em

    A great piece of rhyming poetry that is inspirational to anyone who has ever felt bad about themselves.

    Some days I look upto the skies
    and I wish like I never have before;
    to be skinnier, taller, prettier even happier
    then I realise there's no point anymore....

    ^^

    When we feel like this about ourselves, we often turn to that rather useless form of self-help: wishing! lol. It is often a sign of desperation and rarely does any good. To be fair, you seem to come to that conclusion yourself by the end of this stanza: 'then I realise there's no point anymore...." BUT, is that a positive 'I'm going to be me' realisation or a more depressing 'I give up trying'? I read on...

    ...because if I'm loved then so be it;
    as it'll be for me being myself
    So why should I change for anyone?

    ^^

    A break in the rhyme here (an original change) which also helps to isolate the important point you are making here which really is the crux of the poem and shows the positive thinking you have turned to: be loved for yourself and if people don't like you exactly the way you are, so be it!

    Someone's out there, (you'll see)
    searching for somebody like me.

    ^^

    Back to rhyme at the end in a defiant and inspirational couplet that lets us all know that you will find love but you will do so on your own terms and in your own skin.

    Em, this is a lovely little piece of poetry that certainly has a twinge of sadness, but that is more than made up for with the defiance that calmly screams from it!

    * quick point: 'upto' in the first line is two separate words.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks very much for your time and wonderful insightful comment and thanks for pointing that out too :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    No problem, Em. I shall nominate this on Monday when my votes are recharged.

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you kindly :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Dear Em, you are a wonderful and beautiful person and no matter what we have endured in our past will define us. Please remain true to yourself and never change for anybody other then yourself. If people can accept you for who and what you are you don't need them in your life. This truly touched my heart and hugs and all the very best to you

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you dagmar, that's a lovely comment

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hello Em,

    First- I just wanna say that you are a mix of beauty and talent.

    Second- this is a beautiful piece Em. Change is normal Em , it doesn't mean that you want to be someone that is not you. for me, as a fashion consultant, my term for that is " improvement".

    Third-
    "Someone's out there, (you'll see)
    searching for somebody like me."

    You are right . Someday, someone will see you, the extraordinary you

    keep smiling Em,
    Gel

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks gel :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    You are a beautiful person inside and out. One day your Prince Charming will come along and sweep you off your feet. Everyone has a soul mate waiting for them you just tend to find them when you least expect them. Milly x

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you so much Milly. You always seem to make me smile :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Em, don't ever change! At one time or another we all wish we could be taller, thinner, cuter, whatever. But, then we wouldn't be us and that would be tragic. You are a special, giving, loving person who someone would be truly lucky to be a part of your life. Hugs-

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Aww Brenda thank you so much. Don't you ever change either

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

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  • 11 months ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    Though this is a short write it is very much filled with passion and heart. The use of ellipsis between the first and second stanza is interesting and incredibly powerful for being so subtle. The author's voice is clear, concise, and extremely calm considering the topic - which works out well. Something about this style and format screams "hi-light me in the weekly contest!" and that is exactly what it deserves. Nicely penned and creatively styled.

    • 11 months ago

      by Em

      Thank you so much