I really like your word choice in this piece Ben it really is beautifully written your voice in it is both delicate an powerful at once and I really like your freeverse, i know how it take alittle getting used to bit you write it lile a pro!
The title initially dragged me in - but the content was equally as beautiful. I'm starting to think there isn't a form of poetry or theme that you would be "bad" at writing. Excellent work, was a delight to read.
also, downgrading is so 2008. sorry you had to be subjected to that.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment, but I have to admit that Maple Tree (Andrea) gave me the title as part of a club competition.
As for downgrading, I suppose we all suffer from that sometimes.
Ben, I absolutely love this! It's so eloquently written, I love the whole concept behind this with the "lovelier" flowers and in comes the lowly dandelion and with one simple breath your troubles blew to the wind never to be seen again. Well done Ben, well done! Not sure who was hating, they obviously didn't understand what they had read. Loved it! Brenda
Another brilliant write. Ben you are a tremendously talented poet with an inbuilt ability to write the most beautiful poetry on any subject. Your visuals and emotional metaphors are truly exceptional and a real pleasure to read.
I have been reading your poems now for quite some time and have yet to read a single one that warrants less than 5 vote so I am very surprised and disappointed to see someone has marked you down anonymously without leaving evidence of why they felt it was warranted.
This is beautifully written piece with imaginative floral metaphors and I like very much the way "Each of your discretion floated away in the Wind" one word at a time. Another excellent poem that you should feel proud of and definitely a 5 vote...
I love the format of this piece, it calls out to the audience and stands out in their memory. It does a great job of utilizing the centered format and still creates a unified piece that readers can both understand and imagine. Other site members seem to love this piece, and there is no question why, so definitely a piece worth mentioning. Beautiful.
This a truly captivating piece, Ben. There is a serene atmosphere that surrounds the whole poem. While the other beautiful flowers refused to listen, the simple dandelion became your refuge. Like a loving friend it listened, taking nothing but receiving all you have to say. I loved the word indiscretions here, which means you have been honest enough to the confession you have made.
I love poems involving the beauty of nature because in one way or another we are connected to it. Every single flower calls us to somewhere, as the moon and the stars do.