Comments : Dandelion Confessions

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Love this :) Syrup does the best challenges lol

    I really like your word choice in this piece Ben it really is beautifully written your voice in it is both delicate an powerful at once and I really like your freeverse, i know how it take alittle getting used to bit you write it lile a pro!

    Nice one old chap!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    This is a genius.

    Em

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I'm not sure about that, Em, but I'll take it, lol

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Em is correct! Pure genius! Thank you squeaks for the compliment!

    Ben

    This poem has elegance and grace....sorrow and yet hope....

    You detailed this piece with lovely visuals....I'm just speechless!

  • 1 year ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Breathtakingly stunning!!!

    --- MKKK

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Again a great write coming from a great man.

    nice choice of words..

    and each of my indiscretions
    floated
    away
    on
    the
    wind.

    Excellent 5/5

    Gel

  • 1 year ago

    by Britt

    This. Is. Beautiful!!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Ben, I love the layout here. The seed, like hopes, just blowing away........

    5/5 always.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Thanks all, but someone hated it, lol

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Sod them Ben! Wish people who downrated left an explanation

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Yep, but my guess is the downgrades often have little to do with the actual poem...

  • 1 year ago

    by ether

    The title initially dragged me in - but the content was equally as beautiful. I'm starting to think there isn't a form of poetry or theme that you would be "bad" at writing. Excellent work, was a delight to read.

    also, downgrading is so 2008. sorry you had to be subjected to that.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Ether,

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment, but I have to admit that Maple Tree (Andrea) gave me the title as part of a club competition.
      As for downgrading, I suppose we all suffer from that sometimes.

      Take care and all the best,

      Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, I absolutely love this! It's so eloquently written, I love the whole concept behind this with the "lovelier" flowers and in comes the lowly dandelion and with one simple breath your troubles blew to the wind never to be seen again. Well done Ben, well done! Not sure who was hating, they obviously didn't understand what they had read. Loved it! Brenda

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Another brilliant write. Ben you are a tremendously talented poet with an inbuilt ability to write the most beautiful poetry on any subject. Your visuals and emotional metaphors are truly exceptional and a real pleasure to read.

    I have been reading your poems now for quite some time and have yet to read a single one that warrants less than 5 vote so I am very surprised and disappointed to see someone has marked you down anonymously without leaving evidence of why they felt it was warranted.

    This is beautifully written piece with imaginative floral metaphors and I like very much the way "Each of your discretion floated away in the Wind" one word at a time. Another excellent poem that you should feel proud of and definitely a 5 vote...

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny.. i love this.. the flow is amazing.. everyone has said everything positive.. so ill leave it with

    Well done on another perfect wrìte.. 10/5 from me

  • 1 year ago

    by Kaimeyo

    I loved "for when i was done they stole nothing but a simple breath of me" wow!!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Augustus Black

    This is great sad poem.

  • 1 year ago

    by bubblz

    That is GORGEOUS!!

  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    I love the format of this piece, it calls out to the audience and stands out in their memory. It does a great job of utilizing the centered format and still creates a unified piece that readers can both understand and imagine. Other site members seem to love this piece, and there is no question why, so definitely a piece worth mentioning. Beautiful.

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This a truly captivating piece, Ben. There is a serene atmosphere that surrounds the whole poem. While the other beautiful flowers refused to listen, the simple dandelion became your refuge. Like a loving friend it listened, taking nothing but receiving all you have to say. I loved the word indiscretions here, which means you have been honest enough to the confession you have made.

    I love poems involving the beauty of nature because in one way or another we are connected to it. Every single flower calls us to somewhere, as the moon and the stars do.

    A beautiful write indeed. Added to favorites. :-)

  • 5 months ago

    by LezLove

    This is an amazing poem

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for reading and all the best.

  • 5 months ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Magnificent!