I like the way you spun a sad love story into an unlikely batch of cookies. To me this is significant; it shows that love is often sweet and appealing, buy once these special ingredients spoil, loves appetite vanishes.
What a brilliant piece I like it so much... I can feel the pain in every line..I cried and laugh then cried again and tasted those salty cookies..lol....thanks for this piece...
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
Well done on taking a subject that I could have written absolutely nothing about and given it a special twist. This is excellent stuff.
Take care, Milly.
1 year ago
Milly a fab inspirational poem here as Michael said its significant as the dough will ruin with extra salt from the tears. I like the aaba etc rhyming as I haven't seen that much recently and you executed it well.
This piece is very interestingly put together. The rhymes feel a little unnatural at times, but personally it feels like that adds to the writing's unique pull. The style is common, but even that seems to make this all the more interesting. The author's voice shines here and the lacking punctuation really does add a feel like chunks of chocolate or nuts in the cookie dough - so that was a cool touch.