Comments : Tears in my Cookie dough

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Milly,

    I like the way you spun a sad love story into an unlikely batch of cookies. To me this is significant; it shows that love is often sweet and appealing, buy once these special ingredients spoil, loves appetite vanishes.

    Well done,

    Michael x

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi Milly,

    What a brilliant piece I like it so much... I can feel the pain in every line..I cried and laugh then cried again and tasted those salty cookies..lol....thanks for this piece...

    5/5

    Gel

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done on taking a subject that I could have written absolutely nothing about and given it a special twist. This is excellent stuff.

    Take care, Milly.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Milly a fab inspirational poem here as Michael said its significant as the dough will ruin with extra salt from the tears. I like the aaba etc rhyming as I haven't seen that much recently and you executed it well.

    All the best, Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Milly, what a beautiful sad write. Your rhymes were spot on and the story you tell flows just right. I can just see you trying to make cookies and crying away-darn men! Well done-Brenda

    • 1 year ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thankyou all for reading and leaving such lovely comments. As you know I haven't had much time recently to put my poetic hat on so it means a lot to know ithat it went well. Milly xx

  • 1 year ago

    by Kaimeyo

    I liked this one so much

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    Interesting and very well crafted too! Its the cookie dough that caught my attention and it was worth the read :)

  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    This piece is very interestingly put together. The rhymes feel a little unnatural at times, but personally it feels like that adds to the writing's unique pull. The style is common, but even that seems to make this all the more interesting. The author's voice shines here and the lacking punctuation really does add a feel like chunks of chocolate or nuts in the cookie dough - so that was a cool touch.